...it ended where it did, and even though I can see why it would offend a few, I thought it was a pretty good allegory to some aspects of real life. My favorite part was the martial arts school, I can relate for I once enrolled in one, and Devon's depiction fits my experience quite closely.
I must add that this type of story is not my usual preference, but I really enjoyed reading it, and I think that more than one person can relate to some of the situations depicted. Good job, Devon, I'll make sure to visit your site on a regular basis
Beauty In Diversity