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A little something I wrote...be afraid. Be very afraid.

Last post 07-08-2006, 7:03 AM by fluffy-mittens. 8 replies.
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  •  6/18/2004 2:50:00 AM 499011

    A little something I wrote...be afraid. Be very afraid.

    Yes.  That's right.  I wrote something.  Absolutely shocking, I know. 

    I was bored, and listening to "One" by Metallica for the bazillionth time.  And those two things came together to create the following ******* child of literature. 

    Ah-hem....without further ado...

     

    Trapped in Myself”

    By Cody Del Sol

    Inspired by “One”, by Metallica.

     

    I don’t really recall what happened. Beyond a few random images, I don’t have any recollection of what occurred. From what I could pick up during my increasingly brief periods of actually being able to hear, it was some kind of trap. We had been led into an ambush, like lambs led to slaughter.

    We didn’t have a chance. The lucky ones were simply mowed down and left to rot. The unlucky ones were ever so kindly herded into a minefield. Minefield….that word strikes a chord. I try and move my arms. Nothing. Next, my legs. Nothing. Then I remember.

    I had been one of those unlucky sons-of-bitches. I remember the last moment ever so vividly. I was running, attempting to get the Hell away from there, fleetingly wondering why the bullets had stopped flying. All I cared about was getting the **** away. We soon realized why. I saw the first guy fly up in the air. He was dead before he even hit the ground. Lucky *******. I was horrified. I tried turning, thinking that maybe if I surrendered, I’d get a bullet to the head, or something of that nature. Anything had to be better than THAT. I never had a chance. I tripped, and landed directly on a mine. Everything goes blank from there.

    I wake up, if it could be called that. I try to open my eyes, but nothing happens. All is dark. That is all my life is, it seems. A big, black void of perpetual nothingness. Is this what being dead is like? I hope not. Death can‘t be this bad. I try to scream. I try to cry out to anybody who will listen. I try to do SOMETHING. But nothing comes out. I start to panic. All I can do is feel, and I feel is pain. The pain of nothingness.

    I wish for Death. “Oh please God, wake me”, I scream voicelessly. Nothing. I am still surrounded by the darkness. I find myself accepting the truth. I am nothing but a hollow shell now. I am nothing but the remaining pieces of my mind. My body is force-fed life. Those tubes, feeding me more and more pain. By now, I wish for nothing more but for them to stop. “Please God, cut this life off from me”, I plead. Again, nothing. Apparently, God has no sense of mercy.

    I continues to lie there, though I’m not sure how long. It could have been minutes, hours, days. Time has no meaning for me. By now, time is only the measure of how long until I cease to be. I start to calm my mind, waiting for sweet deliverance, wondering how much longer. I start to think, if living can be this bad, is it possible for Hell to be this bad? And then…..I start to feel it. The specter of Death looms overhead. The life no longer forced into me. I feel relieved. The darkness again starts to surround me, but it is no longer the darkness of this horror, this life, but of Death. I ponder this for a few more moments, and then all goes black.

    Now the world is gone I'm just One.

     

     

     

    Yeah, I know.  It's pretty bad.  But I hoped you enjoyed my craptacular little story, as uncreative and unoriginal as it may be.  And if not...well..you shut up! 


  •  6/18/2004 7:33:00 AM 604996 in reply to 499011

    RE: A little something I wrote...be afraid. Be very afraid.

    Having never heard "One", I'm not sure what kind of emotions I should be invoking...
  •  6/18/2004 7:38:00 AM 605375 in reply to 499011

    RE: A little something I wrote...be afraid. Be very afraid.

    If it helps, here are the lyrics:



    I Can't Remember Anything
    Can't Tell If this Is True or Dream
    Deep down Inside I Feel to Scream
    this Terrible Silence Stops Me
    Now That the War Is Through with Me
    I'm Waking up I Can Not See
    That There Is Not Much Left of Me
    Nothing Is Real but Pain Now

    Hold My Breath as I Wish for Death
    Oh Please God,wake Me

    Back in the Womb its Much Too Real
    in Pumps Life That I must Feel
    but Can't Look Forward to Reveal
    Look to the Time When I'll Live
    Fed Through the Tube That Sticks in Me
    Just like a Wartime Novelty
    Tied to Machines That Make Me Be
    Cut this Life off from Me

    Hold My Breath as I Wish for Death
    Oh Please God,wake Me

    Now the World Is Gone I'm Just One
    Oh God,help Me Hold My Breath as I Wish for Death
    Oh Please God Help Me

    Darkness

    Imprisoning Me
    All That I See
    Absolute Horror
    I Cannot Live
    I Cannot Die
    Trapped in Myself
    Body My Holding Cell

    Landmine

    Has Taken My Sight
    Taken My Speech
    Taken My Hearing
    Taken My Arms
    Taken My Legs
    Taken My Soul
    Left Me with Life in Hell


  •  6/18/2004 7:48:00 AM 604999 in reply to 499011

    RE: A little something I wrote...be afraid. Be very afraid.

    Without music, lyrics are just an assortment of words to me. Nevermind, I'm sure one day I'll hear the song and I'll think back to this day.
  •  7/14/2004 5:45:48 AM 668117 in reply to 499011

    RE: A little something I wrote...be afraid. Be very afraid.

    nice Master.. it was wonderful.. ^_^ *hugs*
    Love`kitten, wandering the world in a dissarray of blinding emotions, wondering who'll lift the viel and let me see, truely see....
  •  8/23/2005 3:49:51 PM 752717 in reply to 668117

    Re: RE: A little something I wrote...be afraid. Be very afraid.

    that song rocks!
    and that story just seems like the logical outcome of the song lol. What i mean is that i can imagine the sogn being based off an incident lyk that... man it must suck
    Insanity, a sane response to an insane world.
  •  8/24/2005 2:35:05 PM 752917 in reply to 499011

    Re: A little something I wrote...be afraid. Be very afraid.

    Well, I think it goes a long way to prove that divinity must have a perverted sense of humor to make us all go through that kind of suffering.
    Kuro-chan
    http://kuro-rpg.net - Your source for rank templates, and other media.
  •  2/19/2006 11:48:34 AM 768225 in reply to 499011

    Re: A little something I wrote...be afraid. Be very afraid.

    ok so it's been a long time since the last post here but... does it matter that much? I don't think this is as bad as you admit it to be. I actually enjoyed reading it. But if God decided that the one in your story had suffered enough and let him go , why say He is the one who induces us pain? Anyway, I say keep writing. Who knows, maybe you'll even publish a book sometime soon.
  •  7/8/2006 7:03:59 AM 782442 in reply to 768225

    Re: A little something I wrote...be afraid. Be very afraid.

    damn.......that story was deep it makes you think ......of things that you know haunt you but will one day come....I understand this story and as people read my post I hope they also realize how true the story was....
    do not worry about getting into that tanning bed melonoma is just a scientific word for sexified
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